writing assigment 6.

 “If I could go back in time”

When I Remember about my live, I just want to go back in the past time to got what I want, some month or some years to gether with my mother, to save my mother’s life. Yapz, just it I want. I don’t want my mother leave me alone. I don’t want to lost my beloved person in our life, I don’t want lost my mother. 

If I could go back in the time, I want to replay it. I will do everything what can I do to save my mother. I will save her life from dangerous something. From the dangerous  disease, from the diabetic disease. I’m very love him. There is no son want  to leaved  from our mother, but why must me? I just want some time, or for a few minute to gether with my mother, I just want it. I feeling alone about that. Why God take my mother very fast? Why God? why you do it. I’m very shock, glomy, and I just want to my mother go back for me, for a few time, just for a few time, I always prayed to God like that. So if sometime I feel missing with my mother, I don’t must thinking l to end my life because I felt I don’t have direction without  my mother. My mother always give me sufort, always give me spirit, always give me love, and now I don’t gether with him again. Everytime I always missing him, but what must I do, I just can crying for a long time and saw our fhoto. If you’re talked, if I could go back in time, for me I just want it. I felt,  I never give my mother happines in our life but she leave me now. I feel as her son, I feel failed Because a small thing that I give to my mother she just smile, never angry with me and now I’m very missing all of that. I missing you mom.. 

Sometime I just want  it. In my life, in my breath, In my way, I just want  to hold  her  hand, kissing our cheek and embrace it again, and I wanna say “I love you mom, don’t leave me again because I will always missing you just for a few minute”. If I could go back in time God I will say that for my mom, I just want it.  For our my friend, love your mom yah... don’t leave her, althought for a few minute, always give your mom love. Because if your mom leave you alone, you will feel alone very much. 

I’M so sorry if my writing have so many mistake because i’m not a perfect person. Thankyou...

Tugas Writing about narrative.

My great experience.

A BEAUTIFUL DAY IN SMA.

My name is Ni Ketut Saptariani. I’m a silent girl, but I friendly with all of my friend. I come from Rumbia but I don’t know, why I can school in Seputih Banyak. I get my great  experience when I attended the  extracurrikuler.one day, when my senior in senior high school was  coming to the class, all of students are required to joining one of exstracurrikuler on the school. I confuse, what must I choose. I need many time to choose one of the extracurrikuler from all of the options.

 Yapzzz...time is come, the last  I attended an extracurricular physical exercise that is taekwondo . why I chose taekwondo because I want to learn martial arts. Taekwondo is a sport that educate and train me to become more independent . exercise was running smoothly , one trial after another has been carried out , until finally came the moment the holding of sports tournaments provincial level . I attended the event . despite the doubts that accompany , I attended the tournament without the knowledge of my family . when I asked for permission when leaving rival , mother scolded me .

Without I ignore , I kept leaving . I still plain and simply the reliable mediocre knowledge, I trying to compete to be champion . until I get what I want. I get the champion after three times against the three other participants . I never felt ill during the game , even all be bruised body did not feel sick . and I dare say proudly to the mother and all my family that I had  won and become the third winner. even though only third winner , but I am proud . because of events it makes me more motivated to get be better . and from these events , I became more eager to practice and want to be better than the others.

 

TUGAS WRITING 3.

Name: Ni Ketut Saptariani.

SRN : 12340021.

Subject : Writing 3.

1.       How to write paragraph with adequate and inadequate cohesion.

                 Paragraph is  a wonderful thing. It lets you quietly change the rhythm, and it can be like a flash of lightning that shows the same landscape from a different aspect."
(Isaac Babel, interviewed by Konstantin Paustovsky in "Isaac Babel Talks About Writing." The Nation, March 31, 1969)

·         An Effective Paragraph Criteria Chart

- has one topic.
- has a topic sentence.
- has supporting sentences that give details or facts about the topic.
- has vivid words.
- does not have run-on sentences.
- has sentences that make sense and stick to the topic.
- has sentences that are in an order that makes sense.
- has sentences that begin in different ways.
- is made up of sentences that flow.
- is mechanically correct--spelling, punctuation, capitalization, indentation.

·         ADEQUATE DEVELOPMENT :

Develop your paragraphs with specific details and examples.  The topic (which is introduced by the topic sentence) should be discussed fully and adequately. Again, this varies from paragraph to paragraph, depending on the author's purpose, but writers should be wary of paragraphs that only have two or three sentences. It's a pretty good bet that the paragraph is not fully developed if it is that short.

·         INADEQUATE DEVELOPMENT :

Inadequate is Psychiatry ineffectual in response to emotional, social, intellectual, and physical demands in the absence of any obvious mental or physical deficiency. Examples of INADEQUATE

1. These supplies are inadequate to meet our needs.
2. We were given very inadequate information.
3. I felt inadequate to the task.
4. Her brother's success and popularity always made her feel inadequate.

·         Cohesion paragraf

COHESION is a state or situation in which all the parts or ideas fit together well so that they form a united whole. Synonym : cohesiveness, coherence Example : There was no cohesion in their performance. The lack of cohesion within the party lost them votes at election time.

2.       Tell more about cohesion.

COHESION is a state or situation in which all the parts or ideas fit together well so that they form a united whole. Synonym : cohesiveness, coherence Example : There was no cohesion in their performance. The lack of cohesion within the party lost them votes at election time.

3.       Write more about the difference between coherence and cohesion.

COHESION is a state or situation in which all the parts or ideas fit together well so that they form a united whole. Synonym : cohesiveness, coherence Example : There was no cohesion in their performance. The lack of cohesion within the party lost them votes at election time.

COHERENCE has two specific meanings/usages. (1) The quality that something has when it makes sense or is pleasing because all the parts or steps fit together well and logically Synonym : unity Antonym : incoherence Example : The stage sets were brilliant and they gave coherence to a piece which was bitty in the second half. The points you make are fine, but the whole essay lacks coherence. (2) A state or situation in which all the parts or ideas fit together so well so that they form a united whole. Synonym cohesion, cohesiveness Antonym : incoherence Example : His arrival threatened the coherence of the group. France's entry enhanced the coherence of the alliance

4.       Show which text or sentence that shows adequate or inadequate cohesion on your paragraph by underlining or putting in the table.

How to Know My Self.

To know my self, you must know, who’s my name, my nick name, when I was born, where I live, what is my hobby, and what the activity that I do when I was  get a free time. My name’s  Ni Ketut Saptariani. All of you can call me Ni ketut Or Sapta. I’m a cheerful girl. Always smile with the other people. I don’t stuck girl. I’m friendly, I very like to help the other  people, I’m so sad if I see the people who need help but there is people want to help, and the last I always try and try to be better from the other people. I live in Metro city, on the small of boarding house on the teladan street 15A Metro city. But my true house in Rumbia. In the best thing about me, I think there is no, because I don’t know what the best think in my self. My hobby is sport like taekwondo, cooking, reading a book or komik, try a new something, and adventure. I do my interest hobby with taekwondo and adventure, because from adventure I can know where’s a good place, and from adventure I can go anywhere and then from taekwondo I can get the knoledge how to keep ourself. I don’t scared with adventure or taekwondo, because the two thing that make me more be brave to face our live and I always think, or For me live is adventure. Get more a good think in our live. My activity in free time is sometime  I get a trafelling but some time I watching a korean movie. In the end, when I go out from my house I can see and feel happy with the world, Because I fell very happy like a bird can fly in the other place so I have a motto in my live “Do something what can you do to get a good something.

Purple : Identification

Red : Description

Blue : Conclusion

5.       You should explain why your text or sentence that you underline is categorized into cohesion.

The underlined sentence called adequate and inadequate cohesion because in the sentence using a connecting word (in the end), and using a conjunction (because) to connect with each other.